Me

I need something to cheer me
to make my heart ache less
will some drinking help
no, it only makes me more fat
i thought something i don’t remember anymore
it left behind a scar and nothing more
the face i see doesn’t smile at me
eyes blank
looking for hope
searching so desperately
look around myself
what i need to fix up
my hair, my relationships or my life
its just my heart that dosen’t listen
it needs something
to comfort, to clinge onto
nothing seems to work
im searching and searching
im searching and now i know what i want
what i want is me
true and as just as me
 that smile
those hopes
those star lit eyes
what i need is just to be me
not what i think i need to be
no ‘should’ or ‘want to’
just the one i see and recognize
Being me is what makes me

How do i write???

Hello people! need some help here, was just looking for some insight on how exactly are my writing and expressing skills. So if you’ve a little time and patience, could i get some feedback on my blogs. PS: read the Aug, Dec 07 blogs, i had lot of time to think then.

And btw I am going to write a book anyways, so why am i asking this? Coz any feedback will only make my book better. 🙂

To make this more easy you can give me rating b/w 1-10, (10 being best) on the following parameters:

a) Language

b) grammer

c) expressive

d) engrossing

e) deep and honest

f) worth being published

g) could be a writer

h) to the point

i) makes sense

j) makes reader feel connected

and here’s a subjective question:

What according you is my area of master until now. None of my writing is fiction till  now, but still what kind of stuff do you think i capture and should work on?

I carry your Heart..

I heard this poem in the movie “In Her Shoes”. Cameron Diaz reads it to her sister on her wedding day. Its beautiful.

i carry your heart with me, i carry it in my heart.
i am never without it
anywhere i go you go,my dear;
and whatever is done by only me is your doing,my darling

i fear no fate,for you are my fate,my sweet
i want no world, for beautiful you are my world,my true
and it’s you are whatever a moon has always meant
and whatever a sun will always sing is you

here is the deepest secret nobody knows,
here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud
and the sky of the sky of a tree called life;
which grows higher than the soul can hope or mind can hide
and this is the wonder that’s keeping the stars apart

i carry your heart, i carry it in my heart.